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Blue-eyed Stranger (Merlin/Arthur reincarnation, PG, 100 words)

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Jun. 17th, 2009 | 08:05 am
mood: soreGaius is an evil taskmaster.

Merlin desperately wanted to believe him.

This blue-eyed stranger who walked to him and introduced himself as Arthur ("My Merlin. I've been looking for you for entire lifetimes") with a fond, intimate look in his eyes.

This golden-haired man who spoke of destinies intertwined ("Our love transcends all time; we've seen seas rising, and we’ll see the earth breaking apart") with a solemn expression on his face.

This young man who gave him pretty words ("You'll always be my Merlin, and I'll always be your Arthur") delivered through warm breath and soft kissable lips.

Merlin desperately wanted to believe him.



Answers merlin100's time prompt & writing_game's prompt: End your drabble with the same sentence you started it with.

A/N: Deliberate grammar mistakes are deliberate. Not sure if this structure works; feels a bit clunky to me.


P.S. This isn't the one with the summary: Arthur thought he had found his Merlin, but did he? Meanwhile, "Merlin" didn't seem to be gaining his memories anytime soon.
Still writing that one, albeit at a doped up snail's pace.

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lilian_cho

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from: lilian_cho
date: Jun. 18th, 2009 05:45 pm (UTC)
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Yes, trope reversal's always fun =)

Desperate as opposed to mental patient stalkery? ;-)
Merlin still hasn't remembered, so he's reversing judgment on the crazy.

Thank you <3

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date: Jun. 18th, 2009 06:44 pm (UTC)
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I think you should write a sequel to this.

*whistles innocently*

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from: lilian_cho
date: Jun. 18th, 2009 07:30 pm (UTC)
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Hey, if I'm the one writing the sequel, Merlin would slap Arthur with a restraining order, and nobody wants that =D

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lilian_cho

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from: lilian_cho
date: Jun. 20th, 2009 01:20 am (UTC)
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You're already preparing for your trip now? =O

You should sign up for cliche_bingo! Multi-fandom, no deadline, you can do rec list instead of fic, etc. =D
I'm sure you can work one of the squares in there.

Ooh which reminds me I should suggest reincarnation as one of their cliches.

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from: lilian_cho
date: Jun. 18th, 2009 07:32 pm (UTC)
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reserving*

Why do I keep on confusing the two words bleagh.

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Lisa

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from: meridian_rose
date: Jun. 18th, 2009 03:40 pm (UTC)
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I like this, as ayes_sid says, it's a twist on the normal reincarnation ideas. And the beginning/ending idea reminds me of certain poetry forms, nice to see it used in a drabble (where of course you can't make the line too long or you'll use up half the word count before you get started :P)
Maybe my grammar nazi is having an off day but I didn't see any grammar mistakes intended or otherwise and I think you made the structure work really well :)

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from: lilian_cho
date: Jun. 18th, 2009 05:51 pm (UTC)
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I thought I was going to overreach 100 words just like that, but this was one of the v. few drabbles of mine that I built up from a skeleton instead of pared down from a glut of words.

(Lines #2, 3, 4 are phrases instead of sentences. But I suppose that's often done in drabbles.)

Thank you for your kind, thoughtful comment!

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